So, this update is a little rough because I've been busy (you may want to open this link in Google Chrome) with certain changes in my life. There has been lots of dinners and relative meetings.
Anyway this chapter, in retrospect could have been tacked on to chapter 7, in fact it originally was so, it is one of the shorter chapters but it is a launching point for something bigger. I have a huge chunk of this story planned out and leading somewhere, although the course changes a lot.
I have to say I am nervous about planning out ahead because that was what I did with IVB and that contributed a little to why it was so short. I actually have "theme songs" for most of the characters and I'm not sure if they will ever fit in to the tone of the story.
Anyway, I am getting excited about this again, I just need to remember to pace myself.
Cyberspace/Internet
Carleigh asked about this in Chapter 5 and I wanted to wait until now to address it. She asked what the difference was between cyberspace and internet and here it is :
The term "Cybernetics" refers to anything you add to your body to perform a task better. So, essentially *prepare to be freaked out* eyeglasses are a type of cybernetics *okay maybe not so freaked out*
So, in this story the internet and cyberspace are the same thing but, cyberspace is a term used because they use something attached to their bodies to access it, the Syndicates.
Past, Present, Future
Something I try to keep track of but haven't been is how I use my verbs to tell the story. I use a lot of "ing" verbs traditionally but, using present tense creates a more fast paced story. To better explain look at this passage from Chapter 5. This isn't the best example but here is the original :
Low acoustic, auto tuned electroica droned out of invisible speakers and the multi colored light strobed along to the pulses. In the corner rows of white bubbles hosted Stimsim casts.
Compare it to
There was low acoustic autotuned electonica droning out of invisible speakers and multi-colored lights were strobbing along to the pulse. In the corner there were rows of while bubble hosting Stimsim casts.
The first uses present verbs the other doesn't and it sounds a bit stilted.
Chapter 8
Alright so this chapter only has one song because the pacing of this chapter changes a lot and I would rather have one good song than a bunch of random ones.
Chapter 8
No Air by Lea Michele and Cory Monteith
Cyberspace/Internet
Carleigh asked about this in Chapter 5 and I wanted to wait until now to address it. She asked what the difference was between cyberspace and internet and here it is :
The term "Cybernetics" refers to anything you add to your body to perform a task better. So, essentially *prepare to be freaked out* eyeglasses are a type of cybernetics *okay maybe not so freaked out*
So, in this story the internet and cyberspace are the same thing but, cyberspace is a term used because they use something attached to their bodies to access it, the Syndicates.
Past, Present, Future
Something I try to keep track of but haven't been is how I use my verbs to tell the story. I use a lot of "ing" verbs traditionally but, using present tense creates a more fast paced story. To better explain look at this passage from Chapter 5. This isn't the best example but here is the original :
Low acoustic, auto tuned electroica droned out of invisible speakers and the multi colored light strobed along to the pulses. In the corner rows of white bubbles hosted Stimsim casts.
Compare it to
There was low acoustic autotuned electonica droning out of invisible speakers and multi-colored lights were strobbing along to the pulse. In the corner there were rows of while bubble hosting Stimsim casts.
The first uses present verbs the other doesn't and it sounds a bit stilted.
Chapter 8
Alright so this chapter only has one song because the pacing of this chapter changes a lot and I would rather have one good song than a bunch of random ones.
Chapter 8
No Air by Lea Michele and Cory Monteith
