Okay, so as many of you know I had a hard time continuing this story. Incidentally enough, it was chapter 13 that was giving me such a hard time (wooooo). I admit, I am still pretty stumped about what will be going on.
I realized what I was writing could never be a true ending but, it couldn't be a beginning for a new story either. As a matter of fact if this was a novel I was writing this would be the point where I shelve it and bring one of the characters into another piece. However writing in this medium forces me to be creative and dig down.
I do feel terrible for writing that last entry because it makes this chapter different, I don't know if it raises or lower the bar. I want this chapter treated as any other chapter though. Although as the title suggests this chapter was a struggle.
Anyway I did sense some difference in this chapter so, I did make some small visual changes to signify a shift.
This chapter only has 3 songs that really go with it.
Eyes on Fire -- Blue Foundation
Pride -- Syntax
The Good Kind--The Wreckers (again)
Instead of making them into a tiny playlist I added them to the main playlist on the sidebar on the top.
Chapter 13
I don't know Shawna, it looked like you new what you were doing in this chapter. I noticed the POV changed from Elisa to Sawyer somewhere or am I wrong ?
ReplyDeleteIt's sweet seeing Sawyer so happpy, it's a different side of him I think. Juliana's parents should let her stay at the commune
ReplyDeleteIs there any signifigance to the people Juliana wasn't allowed to talk to ?
ReplyDeleteAHHh ! an update !!
ReplyDeleteYOur endings are going to be the death of me Shawna. I hope Juliana is okay.
That ending, Why Shawna, Why ! LOL
ReplyDeleteNice transition chapter I honselty though Juliana was pregnant. I tottaly get why she lied she wants to be free and Sawyer and Elisa can't understand that.
I don't know why but I love Juliana's parent's names, they are so parental. I wonder where Caine is off to.
ReplyDeleteI'm missing Juliana's POV, at first I didn't like Sawyer/Elisa but they are starting to grow on me a little I can tell that they are friends first.
ReplyDeletePoor Juliana. I think Elisa is being a bitch and that Sawyer and Juliana should have kept the money for themselves since Caine thinks she's pregnant.
ReplyDeleteWhy do all pervy guys text like they are 13 year old girls ?
ReplyDeleteNo matter how big of a jerk people think Sawyer is Brad is 10 times worst. I'm not big fan of Sid either.
Was there some mention of Elisa having a sister, are we going to meet her ?
ReplyDeleteI though this chapter was okay, it had a few things missing with the ***, I loved the last song, it really pulled together the last scene.
Not gonna lie, I squeeed a bit at the Violet color and when you used the word Ulta completly out of context.
ReplyDeleteI don't want to belive but I think Juliana did take drugs, I mean it's like Sawyer and Elisa are caught up in Sawlisa land to notice how much she is hurting.
ReplyDelete^ First it's Eliawyer land.
ReplyDeleteI liked that Sawyer is getting his life together. I bet Elisa bought out her gun on Brad, he is super pervy.
I didn't pick up any visual changes unless you mean the colored Asteriks they are pretty.
ReplyDeleteJuliana's parents seem like those people who just really want to have grandkids but they don't even seem to care about thier daughter, who they were so fortunate to have. Juliana must feel so alone, I feel so bad for her.
ReplyDeleteI really thought Juliana was pregnant, even though it wasn't his I liked how Sawyer stepped up. Maybe he isn't a bad guy.
ReplyDeleteI totally get why Juliana lied I mean if you can get away from crazy obsessive parents, why not ? I hope Sawyer can save her in all the ways possible.
ReplyDeleteJust the way that Julia's parents called Sawyer "Mr. Miller" shows the lack of relationship they have with each other. On the other hand I find it hard to consider Juliana a "Reese".
ReplyDeleteBTW, Everyone at work heard me squeak a little when I saw the update on my cell phone.
I have been so behind and I was finally able to catch up. I know you had some struggles but this chapter was just fine. And I just loved the little music that you picked out to go with it ! I think that Elisa thinks that Juliana is getting in the way of her happiness with Sawyer but she can't get rid of her because she made all that money for her. I was also a little shocked that Sawyer actually admitted to loving Juliana in a friendly way I'm sure just like I love my ex-brother-in-love ! Anywho the last scene was cute like a little glimpse into what Sawyers life was like before. Can't wait for more
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I'm still holding out for Sawyer/Julia but now I think that he is going to try and save her and get killed. IDK
ReplyDeleteI know it's harsh but hope Caine is on a private plane and it crashes. I do kind've want to see what his little cult would do without him.
ReplyDeleteOh, Shawna you have done it again.
ReplyDeleteJust when UL seemed like a nice place to be we remember it's darker tendencies and if we are to make a blanket statement on whether it's good or evil I find myself coming up short
Caine is soo evil. I think Sawyer should take over United Light and I'm going to call it a lifestyle instead of a cult.
ReplyDeleteI know why the Reeses love Caine so much. I think that he is really their son they had when they were teenagers and they gave him up for adoption and because Sawyer is Juliana's nephew that is why Caine wants them together.
ReplyDeleteOkay, that is crazy but I'm just tossin' it out there.
Are we ever going to know more details about Juliana's time with Brad, even though I'm afriad it might be a little sick.
ReplyDeleteI stopped reading when Sawyer said he loved Juliana and did a little dance, LOL
ReplyDeleteThe header is purple ! is this a sample of what UltraViolet would be like ???? The chaper was okay but I wasn't sure on the order of the songs.
ReplyDeleteI know it doesn't mean anything but if the top picture is supposed to be Julia shouldn't her hair be short and blond ?
ReplyDeleteAnyway there was some structural ball dropping in this chapter(Sorry, I'm a basketball coach). Linda mentioned the messy shift from Elisa's POV to Sawyers.
I can see where this chapter was going but I think it could have jumped straight to the scene in the Reese's house to them moving in with Elisa and then the admission of the fake pregnancy.I've been a little hard on you before Shawna but I like the concepts but the execution, I don't know.
The ending was gripping though.
I liked the subtle changes but there is a lot of deception in this chapter, any update is always a good thing.
ReplyDeleteElisa always says she is friends with Juliana but I think she is secretly Jealous of her.
ReplyDeleteIt looks like everybody has Disney Parents in this story. IF they aren't dead they are evil or misunderstanding. LOL
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ReplyDeleteLinda Leigh -- Lol, Linda homonyms are going to be the death of you ! (re-read your comment) Yes, it did change but, I think it is dumbing down the audience if I put it at the top, I think it is pretty easy to tell.
Carleigh -- Her parents want her to go out. Seeing Sawyer as happy or in love is what I wanted to write for so long.
Laura -- Yes. Since I don't think it will come up again,her parents were just jealous or didn't think other people were as "good" as them. I'll explain more later.
Lili_Pad - I originally didn't want to do cliff-hanger endings and make all the endings feel like endings but, then I did a few cliffhangers and they are just so fun, even if they are torture to you guys !
Corrine-- I am so happy you caught on to that.
CranberriVodka-- Mmm, my favorite ! I thought Melanie was a little modern.
Halle - I know this will be Juliana's story again soon.
SinfulNight- Giving him the money was an insurance policy. Sawyer wouldn't want the stolen money.
Tabby - I did my research for Brad by watching some To Catch A Predator.
Constance -- One of the reasons I wanted to continue is because I want to meet her too ! Don't ask me when or how though.
Aym - I did ? Well, there goes a freudian slip. I think the name will be the same for now.
RedRose -- Intereseting.
HeapsofLace-- Elisa, actually doesn't have her guns anymore. Caine confiscated them all.
MakemeLALA-- It was just the colors
Tia-- I have a hard time answering comments without giving something away, so I will say interesting.
Calice -- And the theme continues !
Jenny P --I think Juliana still loves her parents like all people do but, that doesn't mean you want to stay with them forever.
Tina Roderick - Yes, that was what is was supposed to show that they really barely know him. But, it also reminds me of Pride and the Prejiduce.
Soylent_Green - Interesting
Petite_B -- Hmmm, that's interesting.
Andrea_H -- Me too. Is it the world that is a bad place or the people in it ?
Romeitte -- Interesting but, I don't see that happening at all.
Miller_Time-- You can toss all you want ! Love the username.
Hannah Bananan-- Kind of . . . .
BiteMe --I'm glad
BlueBelle -- I will keep the name the same. The songs really didn't have any specifics this time.
Natalie -- That image was more conceptual than actual. I love your honesty. I think I wanted to make you believe Juliana was pregnant before I said she wasn't.
Alicia K- Interesting. Although the only change is the color. The color change was actually refreshing.
SilverBelles-- I think Elisa is more friendly with Juliana, than BFF's
Slate-o-Phile -- Disney parents ? Never heard of that. I wonder how Sawyer's parents fit in ?
Oh, I see what I did, but it's really a typo. LOL
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