Saturday, April 16, 2011

Hidden and Moving Forward

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So, Erik showed me the forum site recently. I don't usually look at it but, the layout it delicious ! The cupcake in the banner is so cute, I have to ask does anyone know where it is from ????






Hidden and Then Some


I am working very diligently on En Moritas. However, it has kind of gone from a series of vignettes to a pair of vignettes. I don't want to just throw random stories in there so I may keep it at a pair of very short stories.


I mentioned I wanted to blog a little more about Hidden because I was reading it in preparation for En Moritas. Really it is one aspect I noticed and wanted to blog about.


One of my favorite parts of Hidden is the relationship between Haley and Alan. Haley is this kind of sweet, softspoken blonde young man who is optimistic and appears naive when he really isn't. Alan is kind of a cynical, dark haired, heartbroken guy with a dangerous past.


As I am reading Hidden on my lunch break at work I looked around and realized Haley and Alan's relationship reminds me a lot of Joel and Mansfield's relationship. And Haley was written well before I really knew Mansfield so, I thought it was kind of funny.


I think Alan gains this love to hate and hate to love relationship with Haley. Alan is annoyed by Haley but, he wants him around still. I just kind of loved some of their interactions :



Alan : “I don’t want to be brainwashed by you.”
Haley: “I’m not brainwashed.”
Alan: “That’s what brainwashed people say.”

and I was looking at this conversation that happens after they see the report of the bombings and the tv shuts off.  :


“What did it say happen ?,”
“I don’t . . .I don’t know.” Haley said
“It was probably nothing,” I said but, the boy’s eyes were starting to  brim with tears
“I’m scared, what if it’s a raid. What if  we are next, what if--,”
“Stop it,” I said,” Listen if it was an actual nuclear bomb we would have heard or felt something--,”
“But, Alan--,”
“Shut up, I’m going to bed you should do the same.”

I'm not sure if it was my original intent but, I thought it was an example of Alan's reluctance to be friendly to Haley. Alan wants to say everything will be okay and be like a friend to Haley but at the same time he doesn't so he just tells him to shut up. Alan knows caring about Haley or befriending him will mean he has turned his back on Jean. 


Also a lot of people asked about the name Hidden. I kind of regret the name but, I also  think this conversation they have on Christmas sums it up :


“I’m not the one who looks like life has beat me, you are,” Haley said,” I wish you could see how you look to me. So, defeated and angry and begging for a way out. You really aren’t like the others. You are lost and afraid, it’s hidden beneath that body of steel.”

There were a lot of things I kept hidden. I never really mourned Minnow’s death, I had gone straight to killing guys for Rayne. I wanted to cry, I could feel the tears building up but, I always held them back.

Minnow/Minnie

A while ago Lile asked if there was a difference between Minnow/Minnie because someone asked about Rose/Rosalie. 

Minnie is kind of the cute, affectionate nickname Minnie goes by. Jean calls her Minnow because he sees his sister as an adult and not a little girl. Alan calls her Minnie because that is how she introduces herself but, notice after they have sex he starts calling her Minnow and continues to do so through the whole thing. In short it is kind of like the Baby/Francis ( . . . Dirty Dancing anyone ?) thing.


Also,  I had her go by  Minnie so it would be less obvious that the Dorys were named after fish.

Paranormal Romance

So, De Tuileries is coming along quite nicely. Unless I have a big stroke of creativity I think the name will be staying the same. I will say this works does some things that are similar and also different than what i have usually done. I was going to give more hints about it but, I can't seem to think of any.

Moving on:

You'd think I would introduce En Moritas after talking lengths about the Veritas universe ? Well, I'm not. You'd think I'd give you a chapter of De Tuilieres ? No.

I am going in a whole different direction completely. 

I have completed my challenge piece for the challenge LiLe and I had. It started off hard and then got easy and then got hard again. I wanted to mimic her voice and style but, found it difficult.  I  may have messed up some cannon stuff and changed some characterizations so, if something is out of character I want to know.  I almost felt like this reads  a little to much like a fanfiction but, it's what  I came up with.


And yes, I making complete crack fic . Halfway through I literally almost wrote an alternate universe, out of character story. I'll tell you about it later.


I did re-read Litany Lane for this and I have to say one of my favorite scenes in that is Christmas when they all give gifts to each other and I think Clara's is like clearing the dishes and then Fierro gives Emile another rent free year in his house. I don't know I just adore chapter 10 and 11.

Will's End

The playlist is more of an homage than a playlist, I'll admit.

-1- Le Onde by Eindaudi
-2- Berlin's Song by Eindaudi
-3- I Giorno by Eindaudi
-4- Clair De Lune on piano



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Clara DeLune has arrived and lived in Litany Lane for a while. Her life was turned upside down when a fire consumed her  home. Now she lives in a large Victorian house with 2 men . . .






27 comments:

  1. ♡♡♡♡♡
    Wow honey Will's End was amazing such an amazing title. I get nervous re-reading my own work so this was nerve wracking and fun. My favorite part was the ending although I feel like there was something else Hidden (lol) in here that I might have missed.

    I was orginally going to do a mini collection about Litany Lane as an sequel to LL but it's never as fun filling in the blank space.

    I hope I can deliver like this !

    Although. . . I was really hoping for an update

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  2. I couldn't help bit to realize the use of dialogue is a signature SH style.

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  3. ". I was thinking maybe our real lives are on the other side if we can get across or something."

    This line just sort of stuck with me.

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  4. OMG ! Shawna I can totally see it now. I am so honored that I and Joel's relationshop is naturally occuring in fiction. That is so amazing and it makes sense too since Alan gets his face hacked up and he ends up living with some super annoying woman in a wheel ch--

    I should stop ! ! !

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  5. Casio ? What does the doctor need a calculator for ?

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  6. Casio ? What does the doctor need a calculator for ?

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  7. Knowing how old Haley is, it is wierd seeing Alan refer to him as a boy.

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  8. So much awesome SH, I am in love with whoever suggested this

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  9. I was hoping for more De Tuileries, we on the boards needs to know what is next.

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  10. It's fun to read things that are "prequels" because you can look for hints about the future to come.

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  11. When you say "pair" of short stories do you mean it will only have two stories in it ?

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  12. Will's End had a humorist edge to it that made it a fun read.

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  13. IDK, this seemed to be more sincere than a crack-fic.

    love the new layout, it's very calming

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  14. Considering Sundays I now think that Haley was looking to replace his brother with Alan.

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  15. This might sound wierd but I found the first part of Will's all bright and sunny and then I was like 0-:

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  16. Maybe I;ve been in California to long but I thought your background looked like something. . .else.

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  17. Hi Shawna

    I worked on the fansite and the banner image is from the Crumbs cupcake shop website.

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  18. Even out of context this quotes are oddly interesting. Do you have any favorite quotes from your work ?

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  19. Linda-- Well,after some juggling I wanted it to have some kind of moral and/ or theme in the background so I went with learning not to be alone. I was never really sure if it wad established if people can feel pain in LL.

    Maylights-- Not sure what my style is. I tried so hard to mock Lile.

    June - Me too.

    Mansfield-- I am so glad you aren't offended, hon.

    Violeta-- Hmm, I guess I should have clarified she meant a Casio keyboard. A keyboard is more portable than a piano.

    Biteme-- You are right but, they are only 2 years apart.

    Topaz-- Me to but, seriously guys no more challenges . . . okay maybe one more. Maybe ?

    CranberriVodka-- I'm just not ready to let go.

    Harper- ITA.I tried not to do it to much though.

    Maylights-- Yes.

    emilelover-- I wanted to write something a little light hearted than what the LL series turned into. . . which is odd because in my own serials I don't write lighthearted.

    LOTRmom- Thanks ! As I was writing Emile and Clara I really wanted to write them making love behind Fierro's back . . . I know.

    Natalie- I can see that but, at the same time I don't see Haley wanting to replace his brother.

    Tara-- I agree but, in some ways isn't LL like that ?

    Thanks guys !

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  20. I was so worried when Mr. Fierro fainted. LOL !

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  21. @Greta- Ahhh, don't ruin it !

    @Andy H- I should have known it was you, hon ! It is so yummy. I am going to have to make Erik get some cupcakes.

    @Tabby- TBH, not really. None that come to mind atleast.

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  22. De Tuileries is such a great name but I can never spell it without checking. Will En Moritas take place after Mimic or will it move though time.

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  23. We need a clue about DT STAT ! Just a tiny line from the first chapter ?

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  24. @ Shawna @ LOTRMOM - Shawna ! I had to read that twice before I loled and fell in love with the idea. . . oh dear

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  25. @Lile

    What is with all the #'s ? We are not on twitter #dumbbitches

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  26. OMG, Erik I wanted her to know what comment I was responding to and I didn't even use #.

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  27. @Ellie-- That was kind of a fade to black moment but, I wanted to move the scene along. I mean what are the chances he faints right when they get to their destination.

    @Constance-- Hm, great, great question . . .

    @Marcia--
    I grimaced a little at my reflection.


    Linda-- I was so tempted, you don't even know. LOL, glad you approve.

    Erik-- Erik! Okay, now you are going out to buy cupcakes !

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