I Said It'd Never Be Done
So...here we are, there are two POVs going on in Compulsion and one of them has the characters from Sundays, told through the perspective of Harlow. Why Harlow ? Because honestly in TDOSH I learned that Haley's POV is really lacking. Also I have another reason, but we will get to that later...
You guys, I wrote Sundays nearly 4 years ago and after I posted it I'd convinced myself I'd never look at it again. But after TDOSH I just kept thinking, and thinking and thinking and suddenly I had an actual story for those characters.
I was writing Compulsion!Harlow/Alex at the same time I was writing Jonah/Ethan so there relationships kind of parallels but the Harlow/Alex one is a huge extrapolation to Jonah/Ethan dynamic.
BTW LiLe, Harlow Haley (HH) has been making some appearances on your blog , agreeing with all the messed up things the character do.I'm surprised I didn't get called out on this...
Lol, that blunt object joke was some dark humor…but I thought it was hilarious.
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I could get darker, lol.--------Lile, maybe this is meta, but do you think Martin could have ever been good or did his parents completely screw that up for him ? It seems like he could have been decent if Clierro weren't in the picture.Reply
Also, you love Claudia, but I kind of love Derek.- I agree, I think Martin's parents ruined him. I mean they killed someone and covered and up and got married becuase they. . . had to. . . and Roger was a drunk . . . wait.
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I just don’t hate Fierro here, he is doing and saying what he needs to to survive...
-------------NYCBaristaOctober 18, 2014 at 11:44 PMHelios is such a condescending do*chebag. I wonder why he has to show off all the time...also what do you imagine he is talking about with those guys ? I mean don't SGI have to keep most of what they do secret ?Reply(Harlow is supposed to be a little bit crazy, so I'm concerned with how much you agree with him.)
And yet..I don’t hate him.- @ NYCBarista - hmm, maybe they want him to get rid of some vampires at CVS... or maybe they want his help to take down a new drug cartel that just came on the scene. IDK ?
@HH - I like him too. . . kind of... this comment is on to something tiny.
Ahead of the Game
Fun fact; I finally took my chapters from Word and put them in Yola and I have 10 chapters done..now because this is two stories it's more like 3 chapters each, but it's a record for me to be this far ahead. I'm not sure if this means I will be able to post faster, because I want to stay ahead, but it's a nice start.
Compulsion 3
So to recap; Alan is turning 20 and dodging bar shoot outs and Haley is being arrested...-1- Suspects by Olafur Arnulds-2- Au Revior by One Republic ( I will make use of the entire Native Album)
Oh, I kept wonder who HH was. The Cartel comment kind of stuck with me because I'm like obsessed with having SGI set in the Vice/Veritas world. IDK how but something involving Saints
ReplyDeleteYeah,me agreeing with the dark stuff sound pretty right to me ! But I think you get the award for breaking Maxwell.
The name of the Hospital is super awesome.
DeleteLL-- Oh I am going to be breaking so many characters...I can't even.
DeleteAlso, I'm totally working in a SGI reference.
Hope-- It's a real hospital in California, FYI #shawnaisunoriginal
Can we have more Barrister-Finch, I love that name.
ReplyDeleteYeah, I totally didn't steal it from a question on Yahoo Answers.
DeleteCan we have more Barrister-Finch, I love that name.
ReplyDeleteOh, it's like we get three stories instead of just one or two !!!
ReplyDeleteWell, Maxwell and Haley's stories will collide so it's just two stories I just hope it doesn't get confusing with the back and forth.
DeleteI was really ready for some Alan shenannigans but this was so awesome and unexpected. I can see this Maxwell is a little softer than the Sunday!Maxwell.
ReplyDeleteI bet the nine months between being in the Hospital and meeting Haley will have hardened him up some.
DeleteLOTRMom-- Oh, there will be some Alan shenanigans.
DeleteWinterWonderland-- And how.
So when Maxwell fired his kill shot did it bounce of the windshield and hit the pilot or was that a second shot ?
ReplyDeleteNYBarista - Hmm, I guess this wasn't explained well. The pilot got out of the helicopter with them (the co-pilot stayed inside) and Maxwell is a bad shot.
DeleteHoly Mother of Nightmare Fuel. Out of curiosity did the spies ever get out ?
ReplyDeleteCranberriVodka--Oh, good question...I'm going to say yes. They probably sent another group to go get them at a later date.
DeleteOkay, S.V we are offically never taking never as an answer from you ! I see a UL reboot in the future . . .
ReplyDeleteOkay, I guess I have been purposefully never answering questions about Maxwell/Haley being in Vice 2. I kind of knew they were going to be in this since March...
DeleteBut as far as UL goes...I'd love it but nothing is coming together. I mean I just have no idea what the characters would do. If I do get something I'll let you all know, no tricks !
Hmm, could the dream be foreshadowing . . .
ReplyDeleteNooooo ! I think the dream just shows how little these gesture mean in the scheme of things.
DeleteTabbi - Pretty much. I mean it was just a nightmare because Maxwell has a little bit of PTSD.
DeleteWhat I really caught on to was the sort of distance Maxwell feels between the soldiers on the field and himself who works on the administrative side. I can see that clashing when he is at Ft. Harmony
ReplyDeleteYes, this does come up a little bit. Maxwell feels both better than them (because he has prestigious degrees) but also beneath them because they can fight and he can't.
DeleteCan we please have Corp. Strange show up. Just to have his name up there.
ReplyDeleteI know, I know, I need to bring his name back.
DeleteSaltire is now my new word of the day
ReplyDeleteYesterday's was Aglet.
DeleteNext chapter's word is going to be mescaline
Deleteaww, I bet they are going to have to cut Alex's hair when he is at the camp.
ReplyDeleteCPShawna: Lol, like I'd let her do that.
DeleteThere are so many feels in this chapter. At first I thought it was going to be in third person, but I don't think the emotion would have come through the same way.
ReplyDeleteIt was supposed to be in third person, but then when i started talking about Maxwell it was in first and when I realized it I didn't feel like going through and changing it back.
DeleteIf Harlow and Maxwell's POV touch. . . that means Harlow MIGHT not commit suicide ? Y/Y ????
ReplyDelete????
DeleteThis felt so much like a prequel to Sundays but when Alex shows up early I was like. . . this is going to be different. I can't wait to see what it's like with this new dynamic.
ReplyDeleteThis dynamic has been a little bit more challenging. But I will say, this chapter happens months before Haley gets arrested. I was originally going to make this chapter 1 so they are chronological but I wanted to start Compulsion with Alan...in retrospect this should have been chapter 2.....
DeleteI have a question about Chapter 1 and maybe this is in Vice. Why does Alan want to learn from Blackbird ? Does he just want to learn about how his body "works"
ReplyDeleteTwo reasons:
Delete1. Alan kind of wants to learn how his body works and how he was made because he kind of has this idea is he can figure out how they did it he can live forever.
2. Sara told him to. She wants him to fully understand what he is.
Will all of Maxwell's sections get title names ? Operation Risen Sun is just a badass name.
ReplyDeleteMarcia - No, I had that Operation Risen Sun up there when I was flirting with this being chapter one and giving them all names and I kind of just kept it there....C'mon you know how bad I am with naming things (:
DeleteSV, were you leading us on when you said this was going to be a short serial. I feel like we could go on for pages and page ! Come on 100K !!
ReplyDeleteI really wasn't, because I'm trying to get right to the action. I think you'll see now that we're pass all the introduction chapter. However with all these POVs, it's getting a bit longer. That said if each chapter averages 3,000 words I'd have to write 33 chapters to get to 100K...we shall see.
DeleteI was like cracking up at Alan's ineptness in chapter one and (yes) Harlow's misogyny in chapter two but here I was like stone faced sobbing ):
ReplyDeleteAww...I'd be curious to know over which part ? I wasn't trying to be sad just trying to break some characters.
DeleteAlso, I'm glad you picked up on Harlow's mysogiy, he's not exactly the nicest person in the world so it was hard to write him and I kept wanting to nice him up. Like I think he calls someone the P-word and I really did not want to write that.
What !? That's from Yahoo ? What was the question ?
ReplyDeleteYes ! I found it again, it's in the second answer. This was 7 years ago so I figure it's fair game:
Deletehttps://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20080329185107AA7xXS3
Yay for Crazy Past Shawna
ReplyDeleteCPShawna: Tots!
DeleteI'm glad this was chapter three. I think being throw into Maxwell's POV would have made us demand Alex. I also liked how it contrasted Alan getting away with horrific crimes and Harlow not getting away with a smaller crime.
ReplyDeleteOoooh, what a good observation.
DeleteWas it mentioned that Harlow's crime seemed a little Clockwork Orange-inspired.
ReplyDeleteHmm...I guess it kind of was ( I mean, except...no rape). I know Clockwork Orange isn't Cyberpunk, but I used a lot of it's elements. Like in Mimic, they have a drug that's in milk and Dakota in Vice is described as looking like the main character in that movies.
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