In law school I’d been attracted to one of the professors and we’d had a number of tumbles in the sheets. I’d drink in his opinions on law and politics in bed all night. My sexual appetite had grown with the stress and competition of law school. I’d had a number of lovers and discovered quite a few kinks.
So, I do a lot of re-reading when I'm working on a serial, particularly with this one. After I post a chapter I usually start re-reading from the point before I write more. And while I'm re-reading I usually change and edit things.I'll change names, descriptions and wording or even add stuff.
For chapter 5, I was looking at the above paragraph and I originally had the word fetish instead of kink. I assumed fetish and kink meant the same thing, but I looked it up and they actually mean two different things; a kink in about partner intimacy and a fetish isn't.
Anyway, in the process I stumbled across wikipedia's page on paraphilia and I have to say there are some interesting ones like Autassassinophilia, sexual arousal from almost being killed and somnophilia which is sexual arousal from seeing people sleep...I don't think any of these will be making appearances in my serial, but I did go down a sexual health rabbit hole.
Actually, it's interesting homosexuality was legitimately considered a type of sexual disorder 40 years ago so in 85 years who knows what our culture will have to change it's mind about.
Also they rarely find women who have paraphillic disorders and if they do they are usually sadists, which is interesting.
BTW, I don't suggest reading this paraphilia page because there are a lot of gross ones. I mean really.
Chapter 4 -5
So, we finally put Haley and Maxwell together...but things are different. One of the things I don't think got across in Sundays is that Maxwell is putting on an act a lot of the time. He's self-concious and unsure and is trying to stay under the radar so he doesn't get in anymore trouble. But Maxwell is also super smart so when given a job he's to smart for...well, who knows what might happen.
I originally was going to have Harlow make someone eat a bug and I just couldn't do it. I had some dark plans for this serial, but I've been wimping out a lot. More on this later.
Chapter Six
So, this chapter was one chapter that was split in half so it's more of a set up. This is also the one with two mini flash fics.
We're back to Alan, who has become fully entrenched in cartel life...and is fighting with Minnow for reasons he doesn't remember...also Sara has a baby ? Daddywatch 2100
Chapter Six (It's a shortie)
Playlist
-1- We Might Be Dead by Tomorrow by Soko (should have named the serial this...)
-2- Finally Moving by Pretty Lights
ReplyDeleteOh, Honey the rabbit holes you go down. Although I did find something amazing in models tag on Tumblr. Also you stole one of my songs that I didn't find a place for yet. GLARES
I can't even remember how I found that tag, but it's been it's own rabbit whole. I may or may not search around until I find out the models names.
DeleteI think the dark material in this serial that stands out to me is
ReplyDeletethe family and social situations specifically those involving The Alex Family
I'd say Alan's opening chapter was a little dark though. . .
DeleteSo, I will say I kind of lightened things from how I originally envisioned them being.
DeleteYeah I was right about Rayne being the baby-daddy. Right ? Right ?
ReplyDeleteYes ! I was sure someone would get this, it wasn't supposed to be a big reveal or anything, but because of the two different stories going on I couldn't "reveal" it until a much later chapter.
DeleteI wonder if Clarity is the drug Dakota is selling
ReplyDeleteBut also, yes. I don't think that's a spoiler or anything. IDK why I am so secretive.
DeleteI'm sorry but I do not see how this can be the SHV who wrote HMLIS ! The tones and m themes are so different. I can't imagine how you id both at once.
ReplyDeleteTo be honest I wrote most of Haley's story while I was writing HMLIS so they may have more parallels. I wrote most of Alex's POV in one go and then went back and did Alan's.
DeleteWas there a picspiration for the rings ? *searches*
ReplyDeleteNo, I'll still need to look. To Tumblr !
DeleteWas there a picspiration for the rings ? *searches*
ReplyDeleteI love Ivy, she is in such an interesting position and seems like a somber version of the herself in Last Regrets. My new fave !
ReplyDeleteI can see now how you said Compulsion would be like Last Regrets 2
DeleteAshlyn-- I like Ivy too, it's gotten to a point where she sometimes "upstages" characters.
DeleteCalifornia-- I was going to somehow fit the Last Regrets info in this serial as an "as you know" before I realized it was better as a flash fic. LR really should be like a prologue for Compulsion.
It seems like women are relegated to being prostitutes or "side-chicks" can we assume that Sara is exceptional because she is the only woman in the cartel who doesn't sell her body.
ReplyDeleteI Sara gets special treatment because Rayne has had the feels for her all these years.
DeleteWhoopsies ! Meants to say 'I bet'
DeleteNatalie-- We will get into this. I'll come back to this.
DeleteTabby-- Yes and No. But mostly yes.
For some reason the scene with the bug was more nightmare fuel-ish than the thought of someone eating a bug. .. or maybe I'm just seeing it from the bugs perspective.
ReplyDeleteor maybe I'm just seeing it from the bugs perspective.
DeleteIn all my time writing and editing that scene I never thought of it that way ):
I wonder if we are going to get a name for Baby Grace. I bet it will be hard to guess but I feel like she would name him after someone.
ReplyDeleteI will say he doesn't have the same name he had in the Veritas world.
DeleteMMMmmm, Ya'll Ivy should at least get the house or a little something something ?
ReplyDeleteWell she has an apartments and maybe at least half the money ? Although she should have at least been able to keep the ring.
DeleteWell, she doesn't want the house or the ring. She wants to be in the city on her own and very single so she can be how she was in Last Regrets. Although in my head she does get a nice chunk of change.
DeleteOMG, Dakota you did not just get a slow clap. LOL
ReplyDeleteDakota is really Narmy.
DeleteOkay, so if the baby is Rayne and Sara's (SHV could be trying to trick us. . ) can I just say how much I love the mafia-esuw brotherly feud between the baby and Luce
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DeleteYeah, I feel bad for Ivy I mean she just has to stand by and watch. You know she's going to be bitter later on.
DeleteGlitter_Girl - No games, the baby is Sara and Rayne's
DeleteMarcia - Is she ?
I like how we get a callback to Dakota wanting to recruit Minnie, like he does in Vice. Does he want her because she is jailbait ? Or is she just good at her job ?
ReplyDeleteLong story short, he thinks she is pretty and has potential. It's not talked about much in the story, but Minnow isn't great at being a prostitute..that's why she never has clients like Jean.
DeleteI'm starting to think we all have a new favorite character with Ivy Donnelly
ReplyDeleteYeah, I mean even though she is on the sidelines and not in the marriage anymore I think she will be happy to be free again. I'm curious how her personality meshed with Rayne's she seems like
Deletea (sorry to sterotype) fiery red head
Lorrie-- I like to think they found a happy medium together. She did kind of have to tone herself down to be with Rayne though. He is much more serious than she is.
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ReplyDeleteI think in the first chapter of Compulsion SHV mentioned Rayne's absteince from LR. I wonder if that's going to happen again. Like . . .if he wanted to break it.
. . . or why is started it ? Maybe he's religious ?
DeleteYou guys...*checks password on future chapters*
DeleteThis chapter was way to short. I was expecting the flash fics to be separate but I like how they weave into the story ! Do we get more ?
ReplyDeleteNot that I know of as of right now.
DeleteI wonder where BDSM falls into the paraphillic scale. . . it seems really popular now.
ReplyDeleteI don't know SHV, you may have just written yourself and LL into a Flash Fic contest . . .
DeleteMrs. Four-- It's on there, but people tend not to want to "cure" it like they cure the others.
DeleteMansfield-- I see...I hope you accidentally left that comment under Mrs. Four's....or are you saying we should do a BDSM flashfic contest (; (would never do that, btw)
I don't know why I get the feeling someone in this story is going to die. . .
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DeleteIt doesn't seem like Rayne and Sara directly communicate . . . so maybe the baby isn't theirs. I mean would he really leave his heir to be birthed by . . . Alan ?
ReplyDeleteWell it would explain why Grif is there and why Sara won't let Luce watch him.
DeleteBut would Rayne let a Donelly watch his son if he was going to cut Ivy loose. I mean you have to expect some bad blood.
DeleteSLodger-- Alan didn't give birth to the baby, he just happened to be there when she went into labor. Sara couldn't go to a hospital because she's a fugitive
DeleteTabby-- Yes, glad you caught that
Illia- I guess in a way this story is very politic-y. We will get to this.
While I'm trying to hack SHV passwords I think Rayne might be part of the same Religon as Alex.
ReplyDeleteIt's what it looks like. . .just saying
ReplyDeletesecond you can use real people or former co-workers if you like
DeleteTHIRD !
DeleteNO !
DeleteNo. Sorry not sorry. (:
Delete7th - Infinity
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