Bye Bye Litany Lane !
Can we talk for a second about how awesome Litany Lane was and how sad I am to see it come to an end ? I am happy the characters have had there ending, but it was an amazing story and journey I never wanted to end. I hope for the day I will be completely done with one of my serials and never touch it again. Sadly today is not that day and next year doesn't look any better.
The Beginning . . . right ?
So, I mentioned the last few chapters were actually contenders for the first chapter. I originally wanted to start into the action and have the story start with the prologue and then in the next bit Dark would take Rin and everything else would have filled in along the way. I was never going to make Soul half-demon. That came along later . . .
Then, I thought wouldn't it be nice if we were opened into the world by Seraphim's innocence and her introduction to Eden. I was going to tell the story from her POV and have her be kind of an audience surrogate to the world of Eden.
For a while I considered just making it from Dark's POV, but it just didn't flow at all.
In the end, I went back to the beginning and decided to tell the whole story from the beginning. I also wanted a female protagonist so, here we are
WIP
I'm going to try and put something about WIP in each post. Sadly, there is much work, but no progress. But there is lots of excitement ! I still have some work to do with BH so, it's my main focus.
Chapter 8 & 9
Alright, folks I've been in the trenches for a while with these chapters. If nothing else they have awesome music. Playlist.com is kind of disappointing me lately, so I'm gravitating to Mixpod. Although I'm sure it is in some legal gray area . . .
Previously . . . Dark has had Rin killed and Soul has found the body, but the real question is can he get her back ?
Create a MySpace Music Playlist at MixPod.com
Chapter 8
-1- Revrently Quiet by Paul Cardall (Don't fall asleep !)
-2- Opus #20 Dustin O'Hallaron
-3- Follow You Into The Dark covered by Gavin Mikhail
Chapter 9
-1- Judas by Terri Naomi
-2- Hello by Evanescene and Hello by the Vitamin String Quartet
-3- E.T by Tyler Ward
Chapter 8 & Chapter 9
Thanks Shawna, do you realize how long it took me to finish ???
ReplyDeleteI didn't want to mention this in comments but I have to say I've been working on something and somehow I still manage to steal ideas from you ???
When reading this I get completely lost in the dialogue ! So wonderful.
Whoa, whoa, whoa are we talking new project ? I need an answer !
DeleteI wish I had more resolve to keep projects secret. . . I just love to announce things before I get enough words on paper *stares at Veritas reboot*
One word Shawna : Ouch ! OMG, the wings. I nearly fainted
ReplyDeleteWell if I must start the shipping I think we all got a little team Seraphim/Soul= Seroul ?
ReplyDeleteWait, that's not fair. Part of the story is about Soul finding Rin and he can't do that alone. Can't men and women just be friends ?
DeleteI'll blog about their relationship later, but they are totally platonic. I don't want to harp on ages, but I will say when it come to maturity, Soul is a lot older than her.
DeleteBut, if you must ship, ship as you please.
Dark didn't seem so bad in this chapter. . . I mean I still don't feel sorry for him, but he kind of pet the dog amirite ?
ReplyDeleteNot enough for me
DeleteWhich moment ? I mean like all my "villians" I like to give him his human moments, but I mean you shouldn't be falling in love with Dark.
DeleteI think all the excitement for WIPs is coming from our side !! Can't wait.
ReplyDeleteDon't get me wrong, hon ! I'm super excited ! ! ! ! I have so many lovely songs . . .
DeleteNo no no ! Never drink or eat anything from the Underworld, Rin.
ReplyDelete#notgenresavvy
DeleteThis is usually the case, but not this time. Rin drinking the wine is supposed to lower her inhibitions a little bit. It's also a throwback to Dark being drunk in the last chapter.
DeleteI think I already asked this but do you know the names of all of Dark's brothers ?
ReplyDeleteI just know the names of 3. You've heard 2 of them-- Cassius and Dante.
DeleteSoul seems less timid. I guess because he wants to have Rin back.
ReplyDeleteIf anything he seems logical and smart. He hasn't quite Taken A Level In Badass.
DeleteOkay I'll stop with the tropes.
Trope on ! I'm guessing a 50 tropes of SH is going to make a remix . . .
DeleteLol, I read Remix in the Sundance girl's comment and typed it in my previous comment. I meant to say 50 tropes of SH will make a re-aapreance.
DeleteREMIX ! is what you should call this chapter because these cover are SO much better than the originals.
ReplyDeleteThey are brilliant ! I was so glad I could find decent ones for the songs I wanted. I was hoping for a male acoustic JUDAS.
DeleteMaybe I'm still in denial, but with Rin being kidnapped and tortured (sort of ?) and Soul/Seraphim trying to find her mixed with the changing POV reminds me of United Light Y/Y ?
ReplyDeleteI mean the personalities are so different thought.
Oh, I guess it does. Hmmm, this is very interesting to me . . .
DeleteI wonder if there is a reason that Dark's mom recognizes Rin. Has she just seen pictures of her ?
ReplyDeleteI'll just say she has seen images of Rin and she has seen Rin before.
Delete*sigh* Men sure to love to name their big swords.
ReplyDeleteYes they do. Also, this comment sounds a lot like the beginning of a bad joke my husband would make.
DeleteAre Cassius and Cassandra the same age ? Is Cassius that much older than Dark.
ReplyDeleteI would say they have atleast 10 years on Dark.
DeleteI think we got a little insight into how Dark got his name.
ReplyDeleteWe did.
DeleteAhh, Shawna I just realized that chapter 1 and 2 links don't work ):
ReplyDeleteReally ? Hmm,it's probably because I moved the site. I'm on it !
DeleteSince Soul was never orginally supposed to be a half-demon what changed your mind?
ReplyDeleteThis and that. I'll tell soon.
DeleteJust noticed that Seraphim is a good swimmer because she was on the swim team when she was alive !
ReplyDeleteCheckov's Skill !
DeleteOkay, I'll stop
Yep ! ! !
DeleteShawna you are the queen of dialogue, I feel as if everything the characters say is very deliberate and isn't quite old-fashion speak but isn't quite contemporary.
ReplyDeleteAww, thanks hon ! I felt it was to dailouge-y for a while.
DeleteI can see starting it from Seraphim's POV, I think the progression from something innocent into darkness would have worked.
ReplyDeleteI wonder if Rin will run into Gabriel and if we will find out more about the circumstances surrounding murder
I love the idea of transitioning from the light to dark. I wish I had thought of that !
DeleteYAY ! So glad you wanted to do a female character. we still got some male POV from Soul though. I really enjoyed Soul/Seraphim's story. It reminded me of a Tim Burton movie for some reason.
ReplyDeleteWell, their relationship is based on a movie. You'd never guess it though.
Deletehmmm, so when the Angels die they can end up under rule of the Demon King, so does that mean when Demons die they end up in Eden ?
ReplyDeleteWouldn't that just create a wierd circle ?
DeleteEven more where do the Shades usually go (IDK like Gabriel) ? I'm assuming Rin is an exception because Soul wanted her.
DeleteI mean Dark wanted her.
DeleteBasically, when anyone dies Demon or Angel, their Shade goes to the Demon King where it is killed immediately.
DeleteDark had Rin killed and stole her Shade from the King.
Where is exactly the shades are kept or where they arrive is something not even I know.
^ The question is why does Dark want her ? I bet it has something to do with the prophecy.
ReplyDeleteNo . . . .
DeleteReverently, Quietly fit Am-ah-zingly ! it took a while for the song to come on and when it did I really got into the story. The music gods were smiling on you.
ReplyDeleteI had this song early on, but tossed it when it wasn't on playlist.com. I'm glad I brought it back.
DeleteAlso, I think the word you are looking for is a-muh-zing !
Eden seems more French Versailles and Elysia seems British Gothic.
ReplyDeleteUm . . .yeah, sure . . . what you said. I was totally going for that.
DeleteJK-- Wow,I don't know exactly what all those terms mean, but it sounds right.
I wish Rin had a little more hope that she can escape, maybe it has something to do with the Melancholy
ReplyDeleteOT - That cupcake looks like it was frosted with whipped cream. Lazy tumblrs.
It has everything to do with the Melancholy.
DeleteThese titles are getting witty ! I guess Dark's mom is kind of a c*ckblock (:
ReplyDeleteOn that note I guess
Deletelosing your wings > losing virginity
I think she got caught up in the moment. IDK ?
DeleteI'm surprised I haven't used this one before. In fact, I'm sure I have.
DeleteRin was at a point where she felt do defiled and worthless, she decided to "go into the crevasse". I mean if you think about it (which I haven't until this second) she kind of missed out on her wedding night.
Dark's family already seems 10 times more interesting than Rins, I think it's because they aare evil.
ReplyDeleteDarker and Edgier perhaps ?
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