Turning Pages
So, I've been working a lot on tweaking and writing some new Vice chapters to a point that I've been hoarding them in case I need to change continuity, so maybe there will be some double chapter posts in the future...maybe.
I've also been writing some more of HMLIS and it's been interesting as always doing that with Vice. In HMLIS the characters don't swear much, so when I was working on Vice I noticed the characters suddenly weren't cursing anymore. So, there is something about HMLIS; not a lot of swearing.
HMLIS has a few similarities structurally to Lile's NAF, but much less gritty. Which is really just a segue to how much I am really enjoying NAF ! I would love to write a character like "April."
Speaking of Lile
So, as I stated I pulled a Lile last chapter because I had written the last scene of Chapter 14 months before the rest of the serial and it was kind of fun to tie all the events to that scene.
Like, originally I had imagined Luce was going to lose his leg in the serial from an explosion which is why he had trouble walking on the new leg. But, then I wanted Luce to already have a fake leg, so I had to figure out a way that he would need help walking on it...which is pretty much the only reason Rayne pulls it off.
Also I originally had the same "twist" from Vertias, that Alan's mother was the robot which is why he is thinking about his mother, but I changed it so that she was one of the scientist involved with his creation.
Your Questions !
What's up with OHG ?
*sighs* Okay, so as far as I'm concerned it's not technically 'cannon' anymore...kind of. I have an idea for one more UL, but it may not be something I get to until Fall 2014. With that said, I think it will keep most of the backstory and set up in OHG, but with a different plot. It will also not be called OHG.
Sidenote: I'm done remixing serials, but if I ever did remix UL I'd change it so that Sawyer is Caine's legitimate son and sort of second in command and Juliana is the girl who pulls him away from it. Then they'd go outside of the commune and "break bad" or something. It'd be all about believing in something and then finding out that entire thing is a lie.
Ever thought of doing third person ?
Yes ! I think I blogged how I rewrote HMLIS in third person, but it just didn't flow as well...I'm thinking of doing a flash fiction in third person though...don't get excited.
Chapter 15
You guys, I have NO idea how this thing got so long...
Playlist
1. - Falling Away- by Big Scary
2 - 500 Miles by Sleeping At Last
Chapter 15...
Sara and her crew have been assigned to assassinate Julian Walker at the Peace Summits and Sara has decided to send Luce to boarding school to get him away from it all. She has also decided she isn't going to kill anyone and has a different idea of how she wants to do things. Will it work ? It all depends on everything going according to plan...
Honey, I love how you put "April" in quotes. So we know HMLIS is a boy meets girl set up. . but what could be the secrets part ? Also NAF is sort of a one hit wonder so feel free to fanfiction away.
ReplyDeleteAlso you stole one of my songs ):
Well, I won't get into what I mean by "setup" until later, but mostly I mean character age things.
DeleteI'm pretty sure I know what song it is... The Sleeping At Last one, right ?
Aw, loved the moment with Alan and his Mom. I'm glad she was the PHD and not his dad. That would have seemed cliched.
ReplyDeleteI try and do more things with women in Veritas and actually she was a PHD candidate...she never got it.
DeleteOMG, had we even considered that Alan wasn't his real first name ? That changes things.
ReplyDeleteWell, it's not mentioned in the first chapter. Duh how did we miss that ?
DeleteOh, did I not make that obvious ? Alan isn't his real first name.
DeleteSaint I love you ! Can we please have more Saint. Can he get like a spin-off. That could be in third person.
ReplyDeleteI swear if he dies like in Veritas SH we are going to have WORDS.
DeleteWe are going to have a conversation about spin offs at some point...
DeleteBut it's probably not what you think, I should add
DeleteSo, at what point did you decide Alan was going to be the artificial one instead of his mom ?
ReplyDeleteI decided that from the beginning...around the time that I created Luce.
DeleteAlso, I love that you changed your username to reflect the glitter in the serial. *ninjas out of forums*
Now we get HMLIS and OHG updates ! Is not!ohg not cannon with UL or not cannon with the OG OHG ?
ReplyDeleteNot cannon with OG OHG. It will essentially replace OHG. OMG.
DeleteOh Griffin made another appearance. . . uh. . .kind of ?
ReplyDeleteThis scene is actually the only reason I gave him a name. Griffin is also in chapter 9 or 10, because Minnie winks at him when Alan brings her back from Luxor with Sara's case of wine.
DeleteShit, he’d even done my job for me. I guess we superhumans have to stick together.
ReplyDeleteI lold'. Glad there was some humor after such a sad parting.
I have no idea why "We superhumans have to stick together" is something I find hilarious enough to work in twice.
Deleteshaking and crying for double chapter post !
ReplyDeleteI like the remix for UL. If it was a thing would Julianna be apart of UL. Would Rhett make an appearance. Can we glean anything off that and apply it to HMLIS ?
Um...let me think.....if you squint, yes.
DeleteHow badass is it that Oz City is in Kansas. Love the lit references. Where there nothing but farms there before they decided to have the summit there ?
ReplyDeleteWell, it was just wasteland. And I know the name is kind of cheesy, but I chose Kansas because it's looked like a good middle distance between the East and West (this is all based on that horrific map I made).
DeleteThen I had a hard time coming up with a name, somehow Wichita didn't have a cyberpunk ring to it, so I changed it
*Waves like crazy !* *begs for more chappies*
ReplyDeletePretty flowers. . . I fangirl so hard over these images.Has anyone noticed all the pink/purple hues. Are you picking colors to match the site ?
Not really, I'm actually about to change the site look...again.
DeleteCan I just say that I love the fact that Alan's mom can be a PHD in Biomachinery, a whistleblower and still rock PINK even when she is being trafficked across EU lines. Love her !
ReplyDeleteHmm, I'm starting to notice all the Mother/Son moments in this serial.
DeleteWith all these EUS guardsmen around I just know Maxwell or Haley is going to show up .
ReplyDeleteDo they ?
DeleteFunny thought ! I can't unsee Arkham as a mental institution from Batman. DON"T SEND LUCE THERE.
ReplyDeleteOkay, THAT is why I know the name...I called it Arkham because that is a publisher that published a lot of cyberpunk fiction in the 90s.
DeleteSo, how do your pronounce Cyril Porter's name ?
ReplyDeleteSeer--ill
DeleteSo, how do your pronounce Cyril Porter's name ?
ReplyDeleteWow, are Obsidian blades really used in medicine ? I love Rayne whole criminal family enterprise. Are any of his relatives still alive ?
ReplyDeleteWell, okay this is me bending truth to fit my story...Obsidian blades are used in high end scalpels by doctors...I just kind of extrapolated that to knives.
DeleteA CONVERSATION ABOUT SPINOFFS ? WANT/NEED !!
ReplyDeleteI bet this is more about HMLIS being a spinoff or not than about what we really want
DeleteWhich is ALL SPINOFFS EVERYTHING !
Can I just say an Vice spin-off about SG pre-Vice would be amazing !
DeleteOr an Ivy Bro. spinoff about just Slate.
DeleteI love how you guys have ALL the ideas. I need to learn how to write faster.
DeleteFor some reason I love this SH quote
ReplyDeletesomehow Wichita didn't have a cyberpunk ring to it, so I changed it
(:
DeleteYou'd be surprised how many times i have to think things like that ...
SH I think you skipped my awesome feminist comment !
ReplyDeleteOops, I must have overlooked it ! Sometimes that happens in this commenting system. You know I never saw Alan's mom as a femenistic character, but I guess she is in a lot of ways.
DeleteAlso, the mother-son stuff kind of bleeds over into HMLIS too.
SH I think you skipped my awesome feminist comment !
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