Sunday, December 7, 2014

Last Name Basis


And by wishes I mean...get me out of this writing slump!!!

Xmas Story Update
I have a beginning and and end. Zero words and zero...what's that thing called ? Oh, plot. This may be a New Year's Story at the rate I'm going.

Chapter Seven
So, Harlow Haley. He was one of the most "engineered"  characters I ever wrote. I knew from day one that if I ever wrote him again... he would die. It wasn't until I started writing the first few words  that I realized he was also  kind of a sociopath.

In every scene Harlow is in he is taking advantage of someone. He's predatory, controlling and vain. He's also charasmatic which is how he has such loyalty from Felix and Marco.

I don't consider myself an experimental writer, but I'm always interested in different narrative devices and one of the things I wanted  to do was have a character die during their own POV.  With Harlow's death his POV and thoughts are effectively erased (which is why Maxwell had to have a POV). This also changes Haley's identity because no one is going to be calling him Alex anymore...what can I say I love some Last Name Basis.(wink, Fierro)

*Also, to complicate things further Haley is going to randomly get an occasional third person POV, because his first person is super bland when I write it  insert writerly-smart sounding reason.

Chapter 9
This chapter. I re-wrote this chapter three times. Once when Maxwell's voice was 3rd person, once when I forgot to save it and one more time in first person.

So, fed up Harlow tries to escape Camp Harmony and is shot in the head right in front of  his brother, Alex Haley. Now Camp Harmony has its second death and wait...who exactly shot Harlow anyway ?And what's Sgt. Maxwell going to have to say about it ?

-Andulasia by Hammock
-Eyes- by Kaskade (Yes, I stole this from Lile)

31 comments:

  1. Thanks for lookin' out CPShawna !

    Muse : Also Seraphina wears 4 inch heels . . so. . . yeah. Let the games begin

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    1. Don't think I won't put a male character in 4 inch heels.

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  2. All I can think is "What'a weekend shirt ?" like a polo ?

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    1. Well, he wears a uniform most days so a weekend shirt is like a button up.

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  3. Maybe a tight fitting Armani white t-shirt

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  4. I like Audrina are we going to hear more from her ?

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  5. I like Audrina are we going to hear more from her ?

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  6. The fact that this is mentioned as the second death makes me think there are going to be more deaths. . .

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  7. So. . . did the bullet go through Harlow head into Alex's stomach. #nowimustscream

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  8. Is it bad that I'm going to miss Harlow and his messed up POV ? I also like that his name is an alliteration.

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    1. Really ? I hated that about his name because it sounded cartoon-y to me. I will miss his POV because he is so unfiltered as a character.

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  9. Reading about Harlow's engineering sounded like listening to Hotch and Derek talk on Criminal Minds

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    1. I totally see that, lol, that was unintentional

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  10. Yay ! We get a tiny connection to the A storyline.

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  11. Yay ! We get a tiny connection to the A storyline.

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  12. Wow, they go to bed at 9:30. I would NOT make it.

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    1. Well, they are in prison...it's not supposed to be fun times. But also the reason why Maxwell goes to bed so early is explained in the next chapter.

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  13. Are there any women in any of the camps ? Or like a female version since there are women in the RLA.

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    1. I'm going to say no actually. Because the camps are staffed by drafted active duty officers most of the staff are men (women aren't in the draft) so there wouldn't be enough women to staff a female version.

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  14. I have a question about my home girl, Ivy. Are we going to learn if Rayne felt bad for cheating on her ? I mean I know thier situation wasn't ideal . . . but still.

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    1. Ivy fans should be called the Ivy League. I'm making T-shirts.

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    2. *wants T-shirt*

      In all my pantsing glory I haven't explored this yet. I'm not sure.

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  15. Are Belgrade and Hunter the new Corp. Strange ?

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  16. "I liked being in control, it made me feel good. However, it was an interesting paradox that once I’d gotten the power, I was fighting everyday to keep it."

    . . . I bet this is going to comeback.

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