Chapter 8
So, I think a few of you got the wrong impressions from Chapter 8 and I debated whether to clear them up or not. Reader interpretation is so important to reading but, I ulitmately realized those impressions could ruin the perception of the next chapter.
Dr. Channing
Dr. Channing is supposed to be a foil to the other military personnel Alan has met. Mostly, he is a foil to Dr. Frank. Dr. Frank wears a uniform and doctor's coat as a status symbol even though the wearing them impedes his full range of motion and makes his job more difficult.
Dr. Channing does the exact opposite and never acknowledges his military rank even though his is actually quite high. He does not wear the uniform unless he has to. Channing is Alan's superior but never acknowledges it, he sleeps the same place as Alan and treats him as an equal.
Also, Channing is the surname of Juliana and her dad's psychiatrist in UL2. I like the last name, I thought it sounded like a 'nice' name.
Shai & Griffith
So, Shai and Griffith's death were a part of that story structure I was talking about in my last posts. I added their storylines in chapter 8 to help better organize the chapter. I wanted to narrate Alan's experiences at Ft. Life through his interactions with the 2 men.
A story within a story . . . kind of. I wanted them to have the "first meeting", "a moment between family ( Shai visiting Arcadia/ Griffith and his dad) " , "penultimate moments (Shai reorganizing Arcadia/ Griffith moving to Sector A" and finally "death/life".
I wanted their deaths to be ironic in that the one who was supposed to live died and the one who was supposed to die lived.
Picspirations !
Persephone (Summer Glau, I know not the best image of her)
Persephone
Dr. Channing (Based on RSL. This was a last minute inspiration but, I can't unsee)
Chapter 9
Okay, so on to Chapter 9. Once again a short playlist. Which is odd because I have a lot of music I love but, can't find a place for. One song is only on last.fm and I fought with it but, I can't embed it here so, I found a copy of it and youtube mini-embed.
Chapter 9
-1- Better Day by Goo Goo Dolls
- 2- Same Things by Twintapes (Mini-embeded)
Honey, I wish I could write poetry like you did for the Epilogue. Love me some Ingrid Michaleson.
ReplyDelete. . . This helps my writer's block. Thanks
The last section was SO pretty I didn't even need teh visual. Can't wait for the next part.
ReplyDeleteI can't wait to see how these final part ties into this. Any word on how many chapters it will be.
ReplyDeleteNGL, I totally picture Shai as Robert for some reason (((((:
ReplyDeleteI think I got the wrong impression of Dr. Channing, he seems more like he really wants to help.
ReplyDeleteThere is a lot written about 'Feminist Cyberpunk' and the way the society pushes away the females ability to give birth and instaed uses machines to ultimately make women obsolete. I think Veritas makes interesting use of this, especially the way Dr. Channing is able to 're-grow' Minnie.
ReplyDeleteGreat Chapter
Wow Shawna, I'm so happy Alan and Minnie were reunited. It made me so happy !
ReplyDeleteOMG, The last part was AMAZING great music choice ! ! !
ReplyDeleteI wonder where Saint went ? Oh no. . . maybe he was captured.
ReplyDeleteDoes this mean 8 years will past from this section to the next ? Either way I can't wait.
ReplyDeleteUPDATE SOON ! ! ! ! !
The part with Alan touching Minnie through the glass reminded me of how you said you like to write about 'lovers' that can't touch.
ReplyDeleteAlso, Isn't the wedding coming up soon ?
I totally got the "story within a story" vibe from the last chapter. It was done on the sly LOL
ReplyDeleteI noticed how the Epilogue floated from the past to present. It was just so darn short.
ReplyDeleteHey Shawna, I'm guessing you are a fan of FOX !
ReplyDeleteHey Shawna, I'm guessing you are a fan of FOX !
ReplyDeleteThis makes me want to become a scientist. It looks like it will be helpful in the future
ReplyDeleteI did not even really like Minnie but it was nice seeing how happy she made Alan
ReplyDeleteWhy. . . Violet eyes . . . why
ReplyDeleteI still don't trust Dr. Channing. I mean why did he keep her a secret ? hmmm
ReplyDeleteIs there a release date for the next section. I really want to see where this will go
ReplyDeleteHow are Shai and Griffith death ironic if they both die ?
ReplyDeleteSomething about these lines
ReplyDeleteLove burns
And it soothes
I'm home
Life goes on everywhere
reminds me of something LiLe wrote, IDK
Have you used the song 'Better Days' before it sounds soooo familiar
ReplyDeleteAnyone else want to know *how* the war ended. Besides SH said this story is being told in the future so it does not mean that they story won't be linear.
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ReplyDeleteLinda-- I am no poet, I just had the ending as a series of disjointed thoughts. I love ingrid too !
Maylights . . . er, mean either (I may have writer's block)
LOTRMom - I am having a bit of writers block but, it will be 2 or 3 chapters.
Jenni P--Was it the olive skin and dark hair ? Or the cargo paints he wears in Veritas.
Silver_P-- From a writers persepctive your guys ideas seemed like they would me a lot better stories.
Natalie-- I think that is an interesting concept,I would love to write on that but, in this world you still need a female egg to make a person.
MaTow-- Me too !
CaliforniaBlues-- Thank Pandora.com
Sundance_girl-- Um, hmm . . . excellent question . . . oh wait I do know what happened to him.
October S-- No, it doesn't mean that at all.
NillaLatte-- Yes, this did kind of play into that. The wedding is next winter. We are in no rush.
Lorrie C-- Lol !
CranberriVodka-- The epilouge was a last minute thing. It was originally my way of reassuring the reader Jean and Minnow were reunited without having to do a lot of writing.
Constance-- lol, I guess I am. But, I saw an image of Summer Glau not knowing who she was and said "yep, that's persephone"
Ft. Life-- You and me both. Thanks for the name inspiration.
Hopefully writers block won't keep me away to long !
ReplyDeleteTerri-- Really ?
NextMrsCullen--Well, they aren't ike purple, They are a dark black/violet and that is Minnow's favorite color and the color of the contacts she wore.
Peace_Goddess-- Was she a secret ? Actually funny story about this comment . . .
Tanya-- I am shooting for some of it before the year ends.
NextMsC-- Griffith doesn't die. He was supposed to but, didn't. Shai was supposed to be healthy and fine but, he died. It is ironic in the person who you don't think is going to die does die.
Tabby - The love soothing and burning was inspired by Lile. I will admit but, I loved those lines.
Princess- Um, all Goo Goo Dolls songs sound kind of similar. I used Black Balloon before.
Marcia-- I have no idea how the war ended, JSYK
also, on the color thing. Is there a reason there is a purple ribbon taped to the incubator ?
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ReplyDeleteIn my head she was holding it when they found her.
PS - We miss you Lile ! Don't leave us hanging !!!! lol
I'm try so hard. But if it helps my next post has a little bit of what the internet used to call 'sporking'. Not the first entry on Urban Dictionary but the second one because Urban Dictionary gets post by 15 year olds who make any word into a sex act.
ReplyDeleteTake that back !
ReplyDeleteI meant it vice versa it's the first entry on this page
http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=sporked
OMG, sorry. I was basing it on a google search
BTW, it was the cargo pants/olive skin combination. He is my favorite ! ! !
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ReplyDeleteHey, leave me and Erik alone !
That was directed at Lile, I know she is going to spork us.
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ReplyDeleteDude, that sounds sooooo wrong.
But, I'm pretty sure she is going after Smeyer of Sara Palin
I am not, but now that you have given me the idea . . . anyway apart from marrying Shawna I don't know to much about Erik
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